My achievements of the first marking period

According to the first marking period, I did a lot of works for all of my lessons, and I think I learned and achieved a lot. I said I wanted to get a good score and some good feedbacks from my classmate and my teacher at the very beginning of this marking period. Till now, I’m still work so hard. At least it was a lot better than what I did for last year.

For the first thing I did, I tried to write details in my essay, especially for when I wrote stories. For example when I used the painting to write a story, which is called “the dead love”, I used plenty of descriptions to show how they fell in love and to describe how the main characters look like or how those characters thought. I wasn’t a good writer before because I found that thinking of details are too boring when I was writing. As I was a fast writer and reader, I just want to say what I wanted in a quick time instead of using a long time to express my emotion and express my characters’ emotion. Then, I changed in this marking period, I started to think of more details to make my essays a full and colorful one.

On the other hand, I wanted to improve my grammar also in the start of this marking period. In the meantime, I did a lot. For each essay I wrote, I used a long time to revise it and I usually asked my friends to help me fix it. It’s because people were always good at finding others mistakes instead of finding their selves. Even though there were still several grammar mistakes with articles, tenses and sentence fragments, it’s already getting better. Also, I would keep working on it. I believe that I would do even better later.

The reason why I got these developments should be that I was hard-working enough and I was focus on my projects so patiently and carefully. I had never doubted that I could achieve my goals and I was keeping working on my grammar and details for the formal essays and stories. I had never forgot my goals that I wanted to achieve in every homework or participation in this class. Then, I improved the quality of my essays and the ratios of my essays were higher and higher. Lastly, I think I achieve what I wanted for this marking period, a nice grade and some good feedbacks.

To conclude, I want to give myself some other goals. For being a fast writer, I wish my quality on spelling the words right would be developed. Also, I wish I would participate more during the class period. No matter the answer was right or wrong, I must think about more. Last but not least, I think I should paying more attention when others speaking, then I would notice more good ideas from other people. As a result, I would do better for class in the next marking period.

Project draft

Sentence fragment handout

1. Explain what is sentence fragment and give an example

A sentence fragment is part of a sentence set off by a capital letter and final punctuation.

Ex. The circus clowns under the big top.

2. Show what a complete sentence look like and what the complete sentence need

A complete sentence or main clause contains a subject and a verb and is not a subordinating clause, a clause beginning with a word such as "because" or "who." Check out our page on subordinating conjunctions.

Ex. The circus clowns work under the big top.

clowns = subject

work = verb

A sentence fragment:

lacks a verb

The colorfully adorned circus clown.

or lacks a subject

Tumbled across the entire length of the arena.

or is a subordinate clause, or dependent clause, not attached to a complete sentence

Into the lap of a ferocious, hungry lion.

3. Show why it always happens and where it happens.

4. Give some practice and making people fix the error.

5. Play Kahoot.

My moment with my friend

Hubert H. Humphrey said, “The greatest gift of life is friendship, and I have received it”. For me, my friends are the most important people for me. I have some great friends with so many beautiful memories that I would even forgot them sometime. However, I can remember what happened when I first went to a boarding middle school in Shanghai. Homesick was so normal for everybody that went to a new school, and I was also affected by that. As a result, this experience helped me to be independent and helped me to find my best friend forever.

I opened my eyes, and it was already six o’clock. Where was I? I was still not getting used to where I lived at that time. I had just started going to junior high school. That was the first time I went to a boarding school. After a month of school days and a seven days break, I started to have home sick.

It was just a normal day after the break. Octobers in Shanghai were always warm and peaceful. I would like the peaceful scene in normal time, but for the time that I had home sick, it just brought me irritation and anger. The leaves weren’t falling and seemed to be a little bit yellow; some small birds were on the branches. The soft winds blew to my face quietly. But none of these beautiful things can make me happy.

I started to complain in my mind. I did blame my parents who went to other cities because of work; I did blame my grandparents who left me and went to look after my little cousin; and I even blame my little cousin who took the love of my grandparents and make me to stay in a boarding school with home sick. It was a beautiful morning, but my mind cannot be as beautiful as that.

I stayed in the school’s dining hall by myself and I didn’t want anyone to stay with me. “Having no friends is better in this condition”, I thought. However, someone came to me without invitation. “What are you doing here? Eating breakfast by your own in a beautiful morning is really a waste of time!” she said. I was a little bit shy and I didn’t know what to say that time. Then, I just stayed and listened to her.

She tried a lot to talk with me. “Why you just don’t talk?” she was confused. “I think the best thing in the world is to talk with your friend!” She smiled like the sunshine in the sky. I looked in her eyes and saw the color that had been reflected by the light of the sun. I asked, “Are we friend? We even don’t have any conversations.” She answered happily, “Of course we are! And we can start the conversation now! Let’s see, um… what’s your favorite activity?” She spoke a lot and she’s really an outspoken girl. I knew more information about her later. She came to me and “forced” me to do things that I seemed don’t want to do. She knew I yearned for doing that. As a result, I found the air changed, everything became better.

Since the relationships between people are so magical, we soon became good friends. Later, my friend also helped me to join in the new place and I started to do something I didn’t want to do before. She made me feel better and told me what she felt when she got homesick at the first year of boarding school. For my friendship, my best friends are always with me and helped me a lot to be a girl with confident instead of being a shy girl. We would be best friend forever and I would try me best to help her if she met any problem.

Then I became an independent girl, which can help me a lot. During my middle school life, I learned how to wash my clothes myself and I learned how to learn by myself with no one helped me. Also, I started to do better for working in pairs and helping each other, because I’m in a boarding school that all my classmates need to help each other as family members.

As a result, I got into the new condition that I lived. After 3 years, I got to Cheshire Academy and tried to help other people who had the same feeling as me at that time. Also it made me better for fitting in my high school life in another country. Lastly, I want to say it’s difficult to live by yourself in a new place, and it’s really great to be an independent person, but if people have a friend, that’s even better.

The hardest part for a paper

For writing the paper called “Significant moment”, I had lots of difficulties such as writing analysis, finding the story and using the best words to describe the story. However, the hardest part for me is to write the story in the form of an essay and making it a full essay.

First of all, when I start to think about the moment I had that was significant, I realized I had so many memories but I cannot really find the best one with the definition of “significant”. I’m not a person that would remember the past really clear. Then, I thought a lot about what I should write and chose the experience when I went to middle school. After writing for paragraphs, I found that I didn’t write anything about why I got better, so I added I found a friend helped me after I wrote half an essay. As a result, the balance of my thesis changed to the side of the importance of having a friend.

During writing my first draft, I tried a lot to explain my story in a good way and I just forgot to write any analysis paragraph and my introduction. It’s so difficult for me to realize that I was writing an essay instead of a story. And I firstly didn’t understand what it meant for an essay. So, I spent a lot of time on thinking for analysis and introduction. A story can be a piece of independent writing that doesn’t need introduction or analysis, people can just tell what happened in that. However, an essay cannot, people should write enough thins to explain, to write what happened and to analyze the importance of that story.

I was truly confused as a person that always writes stories instead of a formal essay. I tried to find some hook in my first sentence of the essay and I tried to analyze why my experience was so helpful for my later life. Also, I went through the conclusion to talk about what happened and what influenced me after my middle school life. These things did work, but the essay was still seemed like a story. After that, I found that I didn’t have an analysis paragraph for being independent and an analysis paragraph for explaining why having friend helped. I added more information and making the amount of analysis kind of the same as the amount of telling story. Lastly, my work seemed better.

To conclude, I used a long time to make my essay a full story with enough analysis. It seemed better now and there were still some grammar mistakes or confusing sentences that needed me to change. I would try my best to make the essay to be a good one and I am extremely sure that it was already developed a lot than it before. Admittedly, I wish I would work more on my essays and make the analyzing part fit better in the essay.

 

second final draft

For each person, there would be a moment really important to he or her. There were many significant moments for me and I sometimes forgot some of them. However, I can remember what happened when I first went to a boarding school. Homesick was so normal for everybody that went to a new school and I was also a member of that. However as a result, this experience helped me to be independent and helped me to find my best friend forever.

I opened my eyes, and it was already six o’clock. Where was I? I was still not getting used to where I lived that time. I started going to junior high school that time. That was the first time I went to a boarding school. After a month of school days and a seven days break, I started to have home sick.

It was just a normal day after the break. Octobers in Shanghai was always warm and peaceful. I would like the peaceful scene in normal time, but for the time that I had home sick, it just brought me irritation and anger. The leaves weren’t falling and seemed to be a little bit yellow; some small birds were on the branches. The soft winds blew to my face quietly. But none of these beautiful things can make me happy.

I started to complain in my mind. I did blame my parents who went to other cities because of work, I did blame my grandparents who left me and went to look after my little cousin, and I even blame my little cousin who took the love of my grandparents and make me to stay in a boarding school with home sick. It was a beautiful morning, but my mind cannot be as beautiful as that.

I stayed in the school’s dining hall by myself and I didn’t want anyone to stay with me. “Having no friends is better in this condition”, I thought. However, someone came to me without invitation. “What are you doing here? Eating breakfast by your own in a beautiful morning is really a waste of time!” she said. I was a little bit shy and I didn’t know what to say that time. Then, I just stayed and listened to her.

She tried a lot to talk with me. “Why you just don’t talk?” she was confused, “I think the best thing in the world is to talk with your friend!” She smiled like the sunshine in the sky. I looked in her eyes and saw the color that had been reflected by the light of the sun. I asked, “Are we friend? We even don’t have any conversation.” She answered happily, “Of course we are! And we can start the conversation now! Let’s see, um… what’s your favorite activity?” She spoke a lot and she’s really an outspoken girl. I knew more information about her later. She came to me and “forced” me to do things that I seemed don’t want to do. She knew I yearned for doing that. As a result, I found the air changed, everything became better.

Since the relationships between people are so magical, we soon became good friends. Later, my friend also helped me to join in the new place and I started to change to do something I seemed didn’t want to before. She made me felt better and told me what she felt when she got homesick at the first year of boarding school. As a result, I get into the new condition that I lived. Lastly, I want to say it’s difficult to live by yourself in a new place, and it’s really great to be a independent person, but if people have a friend, that’s even better.

Significant Moment final first draft

For each person, there would be a moment really important to he or her. There were many significant moments for me and I sometimes forgot some of them. However, I can remember what happened when I first went to a boarding school. Homesick was so normal for everybody that went to a new school and I was also a member of that. But as a result, this experience helped me to be independent and helped me to find my best friend forever.

I opened my eyes, and it was already six o’clock. Where was I? I was still not getting used to where I lived that time. I started going to junior high school that time. That was the first time I went to a boarding school. After a month of school days and a seven days break, I started to have home sick.

It was just a normal day after the break. Octobers in Shanghai was always warm and peaceful. I would like the peaceful scene in normal time, but for the time that I had home sick, it just brought me irritation and anger. The leaves weren’t falling and seemed to be a little bit yellow; some small birds were on the branches. The soft winds blew to my face quietly. But none of these beautiful things can make me happy.

I started to complain in my mind. I did blame my parents who went to other cities because of work, I did blame my grandparents who left me and went to look after my little cousin, and I even blame my little cousin who took the love of my grandparents and make me to stay in a boarding school with home sick. It was a beautiful morning, but my mind cannot be as beautiful as that.

I stayed in the school’s dining hall by myself and I didn’t want anyone to stay with me. “Having no friends is better in this condition”, I thought. However, someone came to me without invitation. “What are you doing here? Eating breakfast by your own in a beautiful morning is really a waste of time!” she said. I was a little bit shy and I didn’t know what to say that time. Then, I just stayed and listened to her. She spoke a lot. I knew more information about her later. She came to me and “forced” me to do things that I seemed don’t want to do. She knew I wanted to do that. As a result, I found the air changed, everything became beautiful again.

Since the relationships between people are so magical, we soon became good friends. She made me felt better and told me what she felt when she got homesick at the first year of boarding school. As a result, I get into the new condition that I lived. Lastly, I want to say it’s difficult to live by yourself in a new place, and it’s really great to be a independent person, but if people have a friend, that’s even better.