Tuesday, April 14, 2015

The second post - an exhausted day - final


Sitting at the corner of my room without a chair after blowing dry my hair, I even didn’t want to walk to my chair for a few steps. I felt too tired to do anything now. I did like reading books, but how can I read it after my whole day of full of classes, the golf practice for more than an hour and the long and boring sit down dinner? After I went back dorm finally, I took a bath, and used my final strength to dry my hair. How can you imagine that I have to read 2 chapters of Emma and there were a 500 words blog waiting for me? Fortunately, my laptop was just near my right hand, so I don't have to get up. Then, I grab it and started reading more of the books.

For the last few days, I just finished reading chapter 7. I can’t imagine that the plot goes so fast, and it’s hard for me to get concentrated to all the sentences today. After using twice of the time than I usually used, I finished my two chapters. Thus, I read chapter 9 for now. In those chapters, Emma started to make a match on Harriet, her new friend, and Mr. Elton, the priest in their community. The plot became more important that even I cannot focus on one sentences, I might not understand the next sentence. It seemed to be a major problem that it’s truly difficult for me to concentrate with an exhausted mind.

However, when I finished the task by using 200 percent of concentration, I found that those chapters are described in a exaggerated way in Emma’s side. Jane Austen used too many words to described how Emma thought the two young people love each other so much. Emma's mind is so subjective. It’s fun to see a young couple to fall in love, and I’m sure that Emma in this book couldn’t refuse the happiness when she saw they fall in love because of her. Thus, she might overstate to get more joviality in her mind. Until now, the plot wasn’t seemed to be dramatically, but it seemed like it’s just the bedding of some events’ happening. The descriptions are interesting, but the plots are too peaceful to read, so, a big event must happen soon. By reading the introduction of the book, I guess Emma wouldn’t be a matchmaker on Harriet successfully this time. I’m looking forward to see the turning points of the story.

On the other hand, I wanted to write something about Emma’s personality. I think she was too self-approbation, so maybe a failure in her passionate of being a matchmaker would make her clarify herself better and being less proud of herself. It reminded me that I shouldn’t be proud of myself excessively. I was also kind of self-approbation with the satisfied grade I got in this marking period, however they are not perfect. I think I still need to use more time on my class works and other works to do. However, it doesn’t mean that I shouldn’t be confident, because confident is a important personality for everyone too have, but it cannot be over do. The book helped me to recognize myself as well.

Admittedly, I would like to finish my task even though I was tired, but I wish I would be a better day for next challenge blog post.


3 comments:

  1. The challenge that the writer had before reading the book was a good idea to mention in the writing. She talked about how tired she was, and how she had to force herself to read the chapters. I think that those parts made the writing more fun, and made it have a better hook. She can talk more about why chapters were described in an exaggerated way in Emma's side. I feel like that part is kind of confusing, so she can add more information in that sentence. For the fourth paragraph she can have a better topic sentence. I think that the transition between the third and the fourth paragraphs is a little confusing. In the third paragraph where she says "However when I finish the task by using..." she can say "finished" instaead of "finish" since it is supposed to be in past tense.

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  2. I truly like the way you describe your feeling when you read the books. However, I want to hear more about descriptions of the plot. Like what happened in this two chapter.story. My suggestion is add more details in paragraph two. Beside those, you can consider to change a little bit about hook. Since I think you need to more attractive and interste hook.
    Finally, there are few weak word in your essay. Please find a stronger verb or adjective to instead. Other whiles, it's great! I love it!

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  3. I like the opening of this piece -- nice connection to your day. I am confused by the part where you say "Fortunately my laptop was ...." I don't understand why it is fortunate -- so you don't have to get up? Clarify that. Also, instead of saying "on the other side", say on "the other hand"

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